Project Feedback of Community Centre

Introduction

1.The title of the previous project: 

Community Centre

2.Description
The project is to design a community centre for people to participate in various activities. In the community centre, I designed a library, teahouse, other activities' rooms, a hall, a stair and toilets. Those activities'rooms, including a big room and two smaller rooms, are used by other activities and the used tooms of different sizes depending on the number of people attending the event.
3.Comment
1)It was perceived as lacking in the expressive targets of the building, who seemed to be perceived as young people. 
2)The final board is too blurry. 
3)The white background of the final board is better (the background is considered grey).
4)More interesting concepts are even better

Feedback

1.About targets 

My targets: Villagers and tourists in the Xidi village. Because the people in my project area couldn't open my form, I couldn't gather enough feedback. I can only guess that they prefer to spend their free time at the community centre chatting, playing sports, watching movies and other recreational activities.
The functions of those buildings I set up in reference to other rural community centres and cultural centres.

2.The background of the final board
Since the whole building was built of fair-faced architectural concrete, I wanted to use this background to highlight the materials I used.
If the white background looked better, I might make the background a little bit lighter, so it doesn't look too grey

3. The effect of the final product is blurry
When I filled the image with fair-faced architectural concrete in the background, I found the effect to appear squarely tidy. I wanted to atomize this tidy texture, so I added different transparency of the white.
If the effect is not good, I will turn up the white transparency to make the picture clearer.

4.More interesting concepts
The space is limited and cannot be displayed. I should use more space or reduce unnecessary pictures and content.

5. It is recommended to expand the content relative to the two sheets.
6. Maps take up too much space and are unnecessary.
7. The drawing is missing.
8. Do some indoor moving lines, like people.

Other responses are in the modification below.

Modification 

I used Sketchup to re-select some Angle images, then delete some maps and add some drawings. This time I talked a little bit about the background, the picture is a little clearer, the layout is a little more sent.

software: Sketchup, PS.

In this slide, I reduced the map, some small scene perspectives, and added some concept block generation. I also modified the text.

In this slide, I specify the dimensions of the drawing, which results in the drawing needing to be enlarged. I reselected the big picture because the original big picture had a similar Angle in the first picture.

The newly added image is a future interior transparent space, which is illustrated by the correspondence between the floor plan and the small scene perspective.